Post by KADEY MEREDYDD CHAHANDRA on Jul 12, 2011 22:53:02 GMT
Pending !
[/color][/font]Hey i'm char and i'm reviewing your application, please insert corrections that need to be made
good luck!
To Improve:
- Appearance should be two good paragraphs and you only have one so please expand and put a little more depth into it. Really get a feel for the way the character looks and they way they feel.
- You have some interesting personality qualities but I would like to see you expand on them. It feels very factual based and i would love to learn a bit more about who he is.
- Again with the history I would like you to go into more depth, it feels like 'this happened, then this' and its a good start but could you please expand upon the points you've made. How does he feel about all these siblings? What happened inbetween etc, was the wedding a good occasion? Has the impact of getting in the scar affected him etc.
- We have a word count of 300, your roleplay isn't up to the mark so could you please increase this? This is so we know you are able to cope with our word count and can regularly make posts of this length,
Admin Note:
This is a really good start to the application process, if you need any help please do not hesitate to ask me or one of the other staff members
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