ALDRIDGE, meleny christina [done]

[melenyaldridge]

The Revolution Has Begun

"There's no need to call me sir Professor."



FULL NAME: Meleny Christina Aldridge
NICKNAMES: Mel, Melly
AGE: 15
BIRTHDAY: April 15th
SEXUALIY: Straight
BLOODLINE: Half-Blood
HOUSE: Gryffindor
YEAR: 5th
JOB: N/A
SIDE: Order Supporter
SPECIES/SPECIAL ABILITIES: Human, no special abilities
CANON: No


"You don't know what I'm capable of, you don't know what I've done!"



GENERAL APPEARANCE: When Meleny is at Hogwarts she wears her Gryffindor robes. She always wears the pendant her mother gave her when she turned 11 and first started Hogwarts. To her the pendant is a security item that she holds onto very tightly. Since her mother works a lot as an auror it helps her feel closer to her when her mother can't always be there. Various parts of her body are covered in scars since the majority of her family is evil. Her father Emery Aldridge is a vampire who married Christina when he was still human himself.

She dosen't wear any makeup except for the occasional eyeshadow and blush to hide the scars on her face. She currently wears muggle concealer products to hide the black eye she got before the start of her fifth year. She dosen't wear any other jewlery besides that necklace and has no earrings or any kind of piercings because she always thought it was tacky. She never does anything with her hair and rarely puts it up but still manages to stay well-groomed and cared for.

Meleny has long brown hair and blue eyes. She's 5'2 and weighs about 170 lbs. When she doesn't have to wear the Hogwarts uniform she wears muggle clothing such as jeans and t-shirts. Casual wear is her favorite thing besides the Gryffindor robes. She's very athletic and plays Quidditch sometimes even though she has an immense fear of bludgers and has been told she can hit one out of the stadium.

Originally her skin was slightly pale and maybe even tan but it's currently gotten paler from lack of sleep. The paleness makes her look like a ghost. It reverts back to a healthy state some days when she manages to with some miracle get a good night's sleep and after she's eaten a nutritious meal.

MOST LIKED FEATURE: eyes and hair
MOST HATED FEATURE: scars
HERITAGE: British-Italian
ETHNICITY: Caucasian


"The mind is not a book, to be opened at will and examined at leisure."



GENERAL PERSONALITY: Meleny is a very sweet person and helpful. She's quite pleasant to be around once you get to know her. Other than her sweet side, she has a side of her that is quite serious. If someone were to engage her in a battle she'll become serious, won't take her eyes off the prize and will risk her life to protect the people she cares about. Part of her serious side is that she's very overprotective of those she loves. She was overprotective of her mother after she married Alexander a few years or so after she was born. She was the only one who noticed the changes in him, his desire for power, etc. After her mother was killed, she vowed that if she ever fell in love it would be with the right guy.

Meleny is tempermental and shouldn't be crossed when she's in a bad mood. Otherwise she is very calm and her usual friendly self. She can be a bit overprotective which usually gets on people's nerves if they think they're capable of keeping themselves out of danger.

Meleny is emotional and sometimes isn't afraid to show she's scared, or in pain but when met with an enemy she'll try to decieve them and cover up her weaknesses which includes trying to hide the scar underneath her right eye which is the only one visible. The others are on her body elsewhere and can only be seen when she's either getting dressed or undressing. Usually she's in control of her emotions and knows when and when not to show them but when she's scared or under stress the chain binding her emotions snaps and she becomes a total wreck.

Meleny is considerate and helpful. She always knows the right thing to say in a bad situation and has always been thought of as a mother figure to the younger students. She protects them from danger. She's also intelligent. When she was a student at Hogwarts she'd help the students with their homework in subjects they were having trouble in.

The previous traits may seem like she's a HufflePuff but she is part Gryffindor. She may not be brave but she's overprotective and she's a martyr she values everyone else's lives over her own. She would risk her life if it came down to it. When lives are at stake she dosen't care about getting in trouble but when it isn't absolutely necessary she avoids getting in trouble as much as possible.

As of late she's become less bubbly and is extremely paranoid after her incident. She is now afraid to be alone. She's become irritable with people who start trouble with her since she's been experiencing lack of sleep both from constant nightmares and studying for her OWLS. She can't go to sleep unless someone is there with her which makes her fortunate for the dormitories. At home she can't sleep by herself. Meleny used to be too quick to trust people because nothing bad had happened to her yet to enable her to see some people's true colors. Now she's careful of who she trusts and sticks close to people who she's 100% sure won't cause her any harm.

HOBBIES: -hanging with friends
-reading
-watching Quidditch games (stopped playing after the incident)
DISLIKES: mean Slytherins
- dark magic
-Voldemort and his death eaters
-pain and suffering
- death
-her father and twin sister
- pureblood superiority
-Ancient Runes
- Divination
-Arithmancy
-History of Magic (when taught by Professor Binns)
LIKES: - reading
-helping people
-good magic
-defense against the dark arts
-Charms
-Transfiguration
-Herbology
-Quidditch
-hanging with friends
-Potions
-Quidditch
-History of Magic (if someone other than Professor Binns would teach.)
FEARS: - her father and twin sister
- the loss of her loved ones (in this case mother and friends)
- her mother dying
SECRETS: - her sister and father enjoy beating her; the second time she was beaten just before the beginning of her fifth year she was under the cruciatus curse for too long.
- her sister is a student of the dark arts
- her sister gave her a black eye before the start of her fifth year
-scared to play Quidditch (because of what happened in third year but she doesn't want to stop doing what she loves)


"I enjoyed the meetings, too. It was like having friends."



GENERAL HISTORY:

When Christina Kensington found out she was pregnant the doctor told her she was carrying twins. Along with Meleny inside the womb was another baby that would grow up to be the second person to make Meleny's life miserable. This was her twin sister Jezebel and she would eventually become Meleny's worst nightmare. Her father had named her and after Jezebel was born Meleny's life became a living hell. The last thing she needed in her life was someone else to degrade and put her down as if her father hadn't already done enough of that. The two of them were constantly at each other's throats. When she was younger, Jezebel just started out as bullying Meleny like the annoying bully at the school yard because she was 2 minutes older than her and wanted to flaunt her seniority. Basically Jezebel has a holier than thou attitude and it got worse when she discovered the Death Eaters when she got older. She came out first and the reason why Meleny is often naive and too trusting of some people is because she was born second. Later on, Jezebel found enjoyment in physically and pyschologically abusing Meleny. The reason for this because Meleny is half muggle born and therefore filth to her pureblooded father and sister. Later on, Meleny would also prove herself a blood traitor by choosing the Order over the Death Eaters. Her mother is an auror and every night she would come home with horror stories about what Voldemort is up to and the wizarding criminals she's helped catch.

When Meleny got her letter from Hogwarts on her 11th birthday. Her mother was ecstatic and took her to diagon alley to get her things but not until her father had a word with her about the right kind of wizard folk to mingle with. She had also given her a pendant for her birthday. All her life she had been indoctrinated with pureblood superiority and to stay clear of muggle-borns and blood-traitors. Meleny ignored his lecture and left with her mother. Jezebel was also starting Hogwarts since they were the same age but she went with her father later on in the day.

At the sorting ceremony, Jezebel was sorted into Slytherin and that only esclated their sibling rivarly to a higher level. They competed against each other during Quidditch matches in their second and third year. She never missed a chance to call her a blood traitor or half mudblood. In fact, sometimes she wouldn't even use the word half. She comes right out and calls her mudblood because Meleny also has muggle leanings and likes to dress like one. She also defends them if she sees one being verbally tormented.


As Meleny's hogwarts education progressed and Voldemort became more powerful, her father became suspicious when he found letters Meleny had been writing home to her mother recounting her life at Hogwarts. She had mentioned standing up for the underdog and intervening when a Slytherin called her friends the McKennas, a brother and sister from a muggle family, mudbloods and taking a course called Muggle Studies. It later dawned on her father that his own daughter was a blood traitor. That summer he beat her for betraying her heritage and not acting like a pureblood. That was where she got her first scar. After that, her mother came home from work and called a st mungos healer after she performed some healing spells. It was a precaution just in case there was any permanent damage. She ended up limping for a few days. She wasn't in that much bad shape to actually be sent to the hospital because it was only one beating. However, she would end up limping for a couple of days. She just spent a couple of days resting from her injuries.

Jezebel had heard about the letters when they returned home that summer and beat her very badly and she wasn't halfway recovered. Her father was still steaming so he helped and a few unforgivable curses were used on his part. Her mother came by when she heard her screaming and begging for them to stop. She willingly placed herself in the path of the cruciatus curse he intended to use on her mother for getting in the way.

Meleny returned for her fifth year with a black eye, bloodied, and a horrible pain in her ribs. She was sore for many weeks because she had been under the cruciatus curse too long. Madam Pomfrey nursed her back to health the minute she arrived at school so she didn't see the sorting ceremony that year. The pain from the cruciatus curse lingers in intensity most times of the day. She also suffers from horrible nightmares due to these incidents. She's in better shape than when she came in except for nightmares and lingering pain but she can get around easier now since Madam Pomfrey fixed her leg.

FAMILY: Emery Aldridge--51--former Slytherin--death eater [father]

Christina Aldridge (nee Kensington)--40--former HufflePuff--Order Member [mother]

Valerie Kensington--23--former HufflePuff--Order Member [aunt]

Jezebel Aldridge--15--Slytherin--death eater supporter [twin sister]




"Make way for the heir of Slytherin, seriously evil wizard coming through..."



ROLEPLAY SAMPLE:

Meleny woke up the day of her return to Hogwarts in extreme pain. Her father and sister had just mauled her the previous night. She was under the cruciatus curse for a long period of time. Her mother had told her there was no time to take her to st mungos since she had to leave for Hogwarts the next morning. She'd told her to see Madam Pomfrey when she arrived and see if there's anything she could do for her.

Now, here she was at Hogwarts lying in the hospital wing curled up in a ball late at night biting down on her lip to stop herself from crying out. Madam Pomfrey looked over her when she arrived and told her to stay overnight. Although she appeared to be in bad shape, Pomfrey didn't want to keep her from classes any longer than one night because this was her O.W.L year. She was two years away from her seventh year and N.E.W.T exams which didn't make her feel the least bit better. Studying and O.W.Ls were the last thing on her mind right now. Her father certainly did a grade A job of making her suffer. She remembered in her fourth year a Defense against the dark arts professor demonstrated the unforgiveable curses in front of the class which she thought was a pretty low thing to do. Whoever heard of a professor demonstrating the exact curses Hogwarts was supposed to be teaching defense against? Anyway, after that she had never heard of the pain of the cruciatus curse lingering. However, it was only the day after the attack so she expected to feel sore. She hoped it wouldn't last too long. The pain was sapping her energy and she needed it to study and perform magic when asked in class.

Meleny glanced up at the ceiling and tried to clear her thoughts. Besides being in pain she had a black eye she would have to hide from passersby so they didn't ask. She didn't want anyone to start talking about it or for there to be any opportunity for anyone to make her feel worse about it. She was almost afraid of the moment when Madam Pomfrey would let her out of the hospital wing so she could go to class. She knew her sister was in the Slytherin dormitories plotting ways to provoke her while she wasn't in the mood. She was probably even waiting for Quidditch, a sport that required vast amounts of energy to catch the snitch and win. However, Meleny was a Chaser and her job was to get the Quaffle into one of the three hoops in order to score a goal. She could just picture her sister purposely aiming a bludger at her like in their third year in order to provoke her. Any movement or contact seemed to make the pain worse and as sadistic as Jezebel was, she would definitely use it to her advantage.

"Reading between the lines, I’d say she thinks you’re a bit conceited, mate."



NAME: Shana
AGE: 18
GENDER: female
YEARS ROLEPLAYING: unknown
LOCATION: Philadelphia
HOW DID YOU FIND US: ad on proboards

[LILY JANE POTTER]

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Right there’s a few problems with this application at the moment.

Can you read through your application because there are quite a few grammar mistakes, causing your application not to flow, and the structure of your history is very muddled.

• There is no professor Umbridge.
  
• The triwizard tournament never happened.
  
• The reasons behind the way her family treats her are very poor and in all honesty it doesn’t really make sense.
  
• ‘During that time muggleborns were being raped and tortured and Christina just happened to be one of the many muggleborns raped and preyed on by purebloods. ‘ - - When did this happen? Why? I don’t feel this is very canon to Harry Potter. It doesn’t make sense as to why purebloods would rape muggleborns as they would be diluting their own blood that way.
  
• ‘Quidditch matches and she never missed a chance to call her a blood traitor.’ Why is she a blood traitor? Why do her family treat her this way?
  
• The appearance section need reviewing, you seem too focused on her scars and bruises.
  
• The personality doesn’t seem much thought out, after all your character has been through she is still bubbly etc? Your characters personality doesn’t seem to cover that side of her, and seems to be rather random in places.
  
• She’s scared of quidditch but plays it?
  
• Evil twins? Do they exist? Is someone born pure evil or are they effected by their surroundings?
  
• It seems odd that all this is going on and no one has noticed, after all the family doesn’t seem subtle.
  
• I also do not think your character fits Gryffindor that well.
  
• Would her father come all the way to Hogwarts to beat her? Is this possible? Wouldn't professors suspect something?
  
• If she’s been under the crusitaus curse that’s got to have some sort of lasting effect. For example with the Longbottoms.
  

Admin Note:

Okay i’m stopping there for now, the reasons behind the way she is treated in such a poor way is not clear, your writing tends to get very confused and many parts are not understandable.

It may be beneficial to restart your character, plotting out events clearly, and giving valid reasons as to the way she is treated, or think of a new way to add depth to your character without reverting to abuse. Perhaps it would be a good idea to pick a lesser know canon or a new original character.


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[melenyaldridge]

I know with the cruciatus curse the Longbottoms went insane. She has lingering pain all the time. I'll try to fix it. I'm used to this character. I've played her on a couple of other sites.

I tweaked the history a bit. I hope it's better. I fixed it so they're doing it in the privacy of the home. Now that you mention it I probably should've put something about her mother noticing but to be honest, she's scared of her husband. But maybe Christina can have someone protect Meleny while she's at Hogwarts because they do it when no one is around and again, her mother is an auror so she wouldn't have noticed until she got home.

[LILY JANE POTTER]

Denied !

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i'm sorry, but you failed to finish
your application in good time,
this topic will now be moved to the
rejected board if you wish to bring it
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A NOTE FROM THE ADMINS: We are sorry but not enough was changed with this application to make it acceptable. Perhaps starting from scratch with this character may help, the abuse plotline is too Mary Sueish and not enough has been edited from the suggestions above.
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