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Post by DRACO MALFOY on Mar 16, 2011 1:20:50 GMT
The Revolution Has Begun
"There's no need to call me sir Professor."
FULL NAME: Draco Lucius Malfoy NICKNAMES: Malfoy AGE: 15 BIRTHDAY: June 5th SEXUALIY: Straight BLOODLINE: Pure HOUSE: Slytherin YEAR: 5th JOB: Student SIDE: Death Eater SPECIES/SPECIAL ABILITIES: None CANON: Yes
"You don't know what I'm capable of, you don't know what I've done!"
GENERAL APPEARANCE: Draco is almost a spitting image of his parents. In an overview, he has bleach blond hair, stunning blue eyes, he’s tall and lanky. He’s pretty much your average teenage boy, just a little more of a little shit to people around him. To start the details off, Draco has short and pretty scruffy bleach blond hair, and when I say bleach I mean as bright as you possibly can get. His face is ‘V’ shaped, and his features proportionate to it, his eyes are a little large for his face, and are a stunning, make you double-take, blue eyes. In my opinion the color of his eyes is a little scary for my taste, but they’re pretty, and it’s a good thing he’s pretty too.
His overall body, is long and lanky, his arms are a little too long, and he’s always hitting them on something, or making some unintentional gesture trying not to hit someone. His torso is, like every guy’s, ‘V’ shaped, kind of like is face. He has a relatively large amount of muscle, he tries pretty hard to keep up this appearance, but he kind of slacks off while he’s at Hogwarts. His legs are pretty long for his height, which is about 5’ 8”, and still growing, so he’s probably going to eventually get into the six foot category. Basically a way to describe him would be like a Great Dane puppy, his arms and legs are a little too long for him to be able to deal with, so you know he’s going to be a lot taller than he is right now. MOST LIKED FEATURE: His eyes MOST HATED FEATURE: His laugh HERITAGE: English ETHNICITY: Caucasian
"The mind is not a book, to be opened at will and examined at leisure."
GENERAL PERSONALITY: I have three words to describe Draco. Prejudice little shit. Well, that’s what he leads everyone onto believing. He wakes up every morning, looks in the mirror and puts on his ‘I’m the king’ mask and goes on with his day. When he starts to act like he’s all that usually he’s arrogant, crude, and a little abusive towards either half bloods or first years, depending on which is closer. Most of the time he’s leading his goons, which are obviously retarded, and he loves to lead them on so that they worship him like some sort of demigod. Draco tends to be very lavish in the things he does, and it gets a little sad sometimes, but normally if you’ve survived five years of your life with him, you should be able to see right through his king-like exterior into the much darker and more cowardly side of this kid, you can really get into his head if you know how to reach this much softer side of him.
As everyone expects him to be, they think he’s the king; he comes from a multimillionaire family, he’s a pureblood slytherin which everyone believe for him to have been Slytherin’s heir for one year of his life, but all that did was feed his giant ego. Inside though, is a completely different story, it’s where his personality splits in some pretty conflicting ways. Everyone knows that Draco is destined to become a death eater, just like his father and the rest of the Malfoys before him. Only about half of Draco’s conscious really wants to become what he should, a loyal follower to the dark lord, torturing people and causing havoc like his aunt and father. The other half of his conscious greatly fears the dark lord, and doesn’t want to do anything for him, so you can easily see where his personality conflicts.
Now, I don’t want to sound like Draco has the hardest life on the face of the earth, because, he definitely doesn’t. But, you have to admit, he does have issues, and a lot of them. If he denies the dark lord, he would gain a new title as Lucius Malfoy’s Estranged Son Draco. If the accepts the dark lord, then that’s a whole new beast of him getting killed or caught by the ministry, the list of dangers is pretty much endless right now. HOBBIES: Torturing people that are younger than him, <- Ditto for half-bloods, sleeping. DISLIKES: First years, half bloods, his mother’s obsession with shopping, his father’s drinking problem, classes LIKES: Sleep, food, being alone, torturing people, annoying people, being a little shit FEARS: Voldemort, death SECRETS: He’s a death eater, he doesn’t want to be a death eater
"I enjoyed the meetings, too. It was like having friends."
GENERAL HISTORY: Obviously, Draco was born with a silver spoon in his mouth, his father’s family with a ridiculously generous amount of money behind it, the same for his mother’s side aswell. In his younger years, he actually lead quite a normal life, if you don’t want to count the fact that he lives in a giant manor house with peacocks in the front yard, and not to mention the diamond paned windows. But Draco as a child, was very normal. He walked his first steps solo walk at 13 months, and spoke at 18 months, like every normal child, just with a huge playground.
His history really didn’t begin until he received his Hogwarts letter. He was so excited the day that came in the mail, his parents had constantly told him stories of their Hogwarts years, and how fun it was, he anticipated his letter so much when he saw the envelope in the pile of mail at the door, he just about wet himself. He first met harry potter at diagon alley, then on the train, then before the sorting ceremony. He was nice to Harry up until the sorting ceremony, when Harry was put into Gryffindor and Draco himself being placed in Slytherin, he thought they were enemies from the start. To today, Draco is yet to stop being a little snob towards Harry, and even though their conflict has matured, Draco obviously has not . Now after their first year, Draco’s popularity soared, seeing as he did have the Malfoy status and the money to flaunt it, and this is when he started to develop his “I’m the king” attitude from all of the flattery and popularity from the other Slytherins, and now to his fifth year he’s continued his reign of terror with his goons by his side, but it’s starting to calm now as the pull from the dark lord’s influence is beginning to wear on Draco, as he is beginning to slip over to the dark side. FAMILY: Mother – Narcissa Black-Malfoy Father-Lucius Malfoy Aunt-Bellatrix LeStrange Cousins-Fabien & Laura LeStrange
"Make way for the heir of Slytherin, seriously evil wizard coming through..."
ROLEPLAY SAMPLE: From the Post Apocaliptic Dog Roleplay: Left at the Light As: Sorin Vasile
"Reading between the lines, I’d say she thinks you’re a bit conceited, mate."
NAME: Lexa AGE: 16 GENDER: Female YEARS ROLEPLAYING: about 3 or 4 LOCATION: Louisiana HOW DID YOU FIND US: RPG collection
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Post by LILY JANE POTTER on Mar 16, 2011 19:12:24 GMT
Pending ! [/color][/font] please insert corrections that need to be made good luck! To Improve:
[/b][/u] [li] ‘He’s pretty much your average teenage boy, just a little more of a little shit to people around him.’ - - This doesn’t really make sense where you’ve placed it. Personality:[/li][li] ‘...he comes from a multimillionaire family’ - - Is this the best way to describe his family? [/li][li] ‘...they think he’s the king’ - - Why? Can you be sure other peoples characters think of him this way? [/li][li] ‘...everyone believe for him to have been Slytherin’s heir for one year of his life’ - - This is currently happening in our au role play. Rephrase? [/li][li]‘Everyone knows that Draco is destined to become a death eater, just like his father and the rest of the Malfoys before him.’ - - Please read Dracos subplots. He has already become one, please talk about how he feels now he is a death eater. [/li][li]You keep describing him as ‘being a little shit’ why is this so? What does he do for people to perceive him like this? History:[/li][li]'..His history really didn’t begin' - - why? Something must have happened before, don’t be afraid to use your imagination. [/li][li] Don’t forget this role play is au, why is Draco’s history revolving around Harry, what has caused his rivalry with Harry. Think about this. General Notes:[/li][li] The style of your writing is rather informal, and doesn’t really seem appropriate for our application style. For example ‘In my opinion the color of his eyes is a little scary for my taste, but they’re pretty, and it’s a good thing he’s pretty too.’ - - We are asking for you to describe Draco’s appearance not for your opinion on his appearance. Perhaps rephrase this slightly. [/li][li] There are a lot of grammar and spelling issues, try rereading your work and addressing this. [/li][li] The character needs more development, look at the points I have made above. [/li][li] Devlop his personality. [/li][li] Add more to his history, we need to understand why Draco acts the way he does, what makes him tick? [/li][li] Try to improve the flow of your writing. [/li][/ul][/size] Admin Note: If you have any questions please ask and either I or another member of staff will try to help you. - ADMINS -[/SIZE][/color][/font][/center]
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