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Post by floracarrow on Apr 13, 2011 17:18:03 GMT
The Revolution Has Begun
"There's no need to call me sir Professor."
FULL NAME: Flora Sophia Carrow (soon to be weasley tho)NICKNAMES: Flora Dora, Alecta, SweetPea AGE:16 BIRTHDAY: 12/21 SEXUALIY: straight BLOODLINE: Pureblood HOUSE: Slytherin YEAR: 6th JOB: Student SIDE: OOTP SPECIES/SPECIAL ABILITIES: None CANON: Minor Cannon
"You don't know what I'm capable of, you don't know what I've done!"GENERAL APPEARANCE: Flora has brown hair, it’s either up in a ponytail, or hanging loose. She wears Green Dresses, Green hair ties, generally anything green and stretchy. She needs strechy clothes to fit over her… rather englarged belly. Blame Weasley for that.Often dressed in her Slytherin robes she’s outside sitting in the stands Watching the teams practice for the matches, and she’ll never let on about things going on tween her and Weasley. Her Eyes are ravenclaw Blue, which is odd for a Slytherin. MOST LIKED FEATURE: Her hair MOST HATED FEATURE: Her eyes, they’re blue… like ravenclaw house! HERITAGE: English ETHNICITY: Scottish
"The mind is not a book, to be opened at will and examined at leisure."
GENERAL PERSONALITY: Hello, i am Flora Aleta Carrow, and i am 16 years old, which means totally legal to drink well with a meal, but not like I’ll be doing much of that anymore. I was sorted into Slytherin house, and i Throughly enjoy hanging out with my house mates, despite my current choices, and annoying Hesta my sister. I.... OW! HESTER! stinging Hexs hurt...i'm telling mom you hexxed me and i don't care about the stupid homework so ! Yeah, yeah yeah.... i know "oh such a lady you are" be lucky i didn't let the full moon show! where was i? oh yes, I am the Louder twin, Hesta likes to think, i'm usually the one singing IRISH drinking songs while on a bunch of glasses. I do like to play a joke or two on my fellow house mates, and my sister as well. My Parents, well i should say our parents, are Well... i guess there out of the picture, really the only two family we have are Cousins Alecto and Amycus Both of which are Death eaters, and are quite proud of there two nieces, We are both members of the slug club, Like my two Cousins, and both of them have there favorites. Cousin Alecto prefers Hesta, and Amycus likes me! We both have a big old secret, want to hear? Promise not to say anything? Ok, here it goes. Hesta and I are HUGE puddlemere fans! We both attempt to see the scores in the daily prophet, or try to go to a game. We both fein bordom until the chaparones decide to leave, then we are Hollering and Yelling for puddlemere, but I think they both know… but pretend not to. My hair, like hester's, is sometime straight or sometimes it wavy, and we both wear WAY too much green, but we like the color. Well, I must depart, Hesta is MAKING me do homework. Evil Divination... HOBBIES: DISLIKES: Her Slytherin classmates, Not being able to pick her own damn husband, gryfindor males,all except a certain gryf, tranfiguration class, Rain LIKES: Flying, Potions, hanging with her friends outside of school,Her sister’s advice, Defense against the dark arts FEARS:her Cousin finding out bout what happended in the ROR, Her cousin also findingout she’s not a death eater SECRETS: First year blew up her cauldron and blamed another student, Loves George weasley
"I enjoyed the meetings, too. It was like having friends." GENERAL HISTORY: Flora was born into a well off family, the carrows. The only child of Alexis and Percival Carrow, and twin sister to Hestia Carrow. The two Reluctantly Signed over care to her Sister and her brother and rarely, if at all, speak to the girls. Both flora and Hestia both believe there mom and dad died in a fire and they survived. For so many years they believe they were gone, until one day they met them! Alexis ran up to the Girls and hugged them, saying how much they were grown, and they were sorry for letting them go, and they should always listen to Cousiny and uncle.. then she walked off.. out of there lives again. Flora became imbittered towards her Cousin for lying to her, and refused to follow her Cousins path. She ended up in Slytherin, like her sister. She took classes with her sister, and the two began to repair a rather shattered friendship. Then it happended. Flora snuck off with a 7th year george weasley. 3 weeks later: She was with child… George Weasely’s child. It’s been 5 months now, and They’re both Thrilled. Hopefully a set of Boys to take after there dad FAMILY: Cousins- Doesn’t speak to them anymore
"Make way for the heir of Slytherin, seriously evil wizard coming through..."
ROLEPLAY SAMPLE: Alice Sat alone on the front steps of her parents flat watching the clouds roll. The wizarding world had become a dangerous place, and even for someone as sheltered as Alice, she could see the sign of the times. Things wouldn't stay the same for long, and Muggle born families had to register now. This worried Alice and allot of her family since they had Muggle friends and Alice was very close to her Au Pair, Louise. Would Louise have to go away back to France and stay there, would she have an Au Pair when she came home for the school holidays? These Questions bugged Alice and she wanted answers, But asking her parents was a no go. They were to busy planning Alice's official “Going off to school” party, So Alice was stuck watching the clouds and waiting for lunch to be prepared. She’d go inside, have lunch as probably ask Louise about it, that’s what she’d do. She watched a mother and a little girl walking hand in hand, and she missed the days that her mother and her could do that. Tea parties were no longer as grand, and mother daughter day was gone for good it seemed.it wasn't from Alice's lack of trying to get close to her mom again,Claire was a social butterfly. “Madame Alice! Lunch iz Served! Please come inside right now!” Louise Yelled out the front door prompting Alice to run inside.
"Reading between the lines, I’d say she thinks you’re a bit conceited, mate." NAME: mack aka goose AGE: 25 GENDER: female YEARS ROLEPLAYING: 11 LOCATION: The great hall HOW DID YOU FIND US: George weasely sent me!
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Post by LILY JANE POTTER on Apr 13, 2011 19:06:41 GMT
Denied ! [/color] i'm sorry, but you failed to finish your application in good time, this topic will now be moved to the rejected board if you wish to bring it back, please pm an admin, thanks. - ADMINS -
To Improve:
- The appearance is just too short and not detailed enough.
- Okay so it’s custom to write personality in 3rd person, for example ‘Flora tends to be stubborn’ etc etc. So this makes your whole personality section very difficult to read.
- The personality section also doesn’t really give any information on what Floras personality is like, and is more like a mini history.
- You haven’t filled any hobbies in at all.
- We are an Au role play and the slug club doesn’t exist, therefore your character would not have been a part of it.
- The ROR? You should write what this means in full as well as explaining what happened here.
- I don’t really understand why your character supports the Order of the Phoenix when she comes from a family that are all death eater supporters. Your application does not explain this.
- Why did your characters parents sign the twins over to the other side of their family? Why would this happen?
- You also God mod stating that George is thrilled she is pregnant, and you suggest they may be married.
- Why can’t your character choose who she would like to marry?
- There are a lot of grammar and spelling mistakes within your writing. You also change tenses a lot which is very confusing.
In conclusion your application is not detailed enough, most of what you have written is very confusing and you barely touch the surface of your characters feelings around George and the pregnancy. I don’t really understand much of your history with the two sides of the families nor do i think you talk enough about the expectations around your character being from a pureblood family.
Overall there are too many faults with this application in ability to write as your application is very confusing and in character development, so I am rejecting this character. You may be more suited to an original character on this site, or a no application site and a beginner level role play.
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